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Post by SpottedBlades on May 2, 2016 11:34:26 GMT
So. Here goes. This thread will be the continuation to the Mspaforums thread of Zodiacstuck, an adventure of 170+ pages. It is advised to read it first, for which is hereby provided a mirror link. But, if you're new or need a refresh, here is a non-exhaustive summary: The action takes place on Sotergan. Twelve trolls, each related to an animal of the Chinese zodiac and from a different country, will play the game of Sgrub Delta. They are Silyam the nerdy bundle of nerves, Carnos the douchebag speaking like a 13-year old, Gallia the squad mom, Ferren the grumpy introvert, Blatty the slow-witted true neutral, Benkan the manly player, Weisch the overweight hacker, Ratter the pennyless kid, Cabela the whiny pony princess, Maffen the fez-wearing punchingball, Nibber the transgender fashionista and Ryudra the sassy prisoner. They form two teams, the Defensers and the Predators. As they enter their game sessions, more is learned about the trolls, how they live and what their innate powers, or Suprabilities, are. They are soon contacted by mysterious shadows who watch them from a far away universe. Shadows who are revealed to be Yalia, evolved fish-like creatures who have played the game before. Milly the shouting leader, Reyen the cruel jerk, Elysa the overcurious scientist and Marty the mute poet. They were about to win, when a demoniac creature of black and white had stripped them of their victory, leaving them with no means of return. One precious artifact of great power, the Pearl, has been stolen from them, and is now in possession of the creature, a talking bipedal dog in suit and tie named Karudar. He can travel through dimensions with the help of Absolun and Eternity, two cats with complete power over time and space. Soon trolls learn that they are part of an even bigger scheme. The Yalia, who first have tried to stop the trolls from playing, now have to team with them to end Karudar and recover their lost Pearl. But as foretold long ago, when Karudar loses the Pearl, he will seek for an even more powerful artefact... Also, they all have cool superpowers, speak in badly-translated languages, and there's tons of worldbuilding. Some ancestor storyline too. Yeah I know it sounds boring but it's actually kind of cool. I've read it many times and I'd recommend it.
Last update was Yalia: Hang out and discuss plans, where the fishpeople decide that of what they're gonna do next. Then, return to the trolls with By other team, I meant Predators, and a very angry Ferren. Ferren: motherfuckinG… Ferren: can'T bE actuallY seriouS Ferren: whY arE therE moonS everywherE? dO theY wanT tO triggeR mE oR somethinG? Ferren: thiS iS blatanT discriminatioN againsT limebloodS! don'T theY knoW I caN suE theM oveR thiS? Ferren: therE arE literallY billionS oF possibilitieS oF whaT mY gamE planeT coulD havE lookeD likE, buT nO! Ferren: thE gamE haD tO givE mE thE fuckinG lanD oF moonS anD whateveR! What should be next? Also, for people who asked for it, here's an archive of the old post on Mspaforums. Also as well, an opinion poll, in a desperate try to quell my insecurities.
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Post by shadowsandbag on May 3, 2016 2:16:41 GMT
Alchemize glasses that block out MOON RAYS
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Post by the dude on May 3, 2016 3:20:00 GMT
Give your sprite a legendary BINCH splap
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 3, 2016 20:58:59 GMT
Ferren: oH welL. Ferren: aT leasT thosE moonS don'T seeM tO emiT anY radiationS. Ferren: whicH meanS I risK nothinG. I don'T eveN neeD mY moonglasseS. Ferren: that'S A relieF. Ferren: noW, tO figurE ouT thE fucK I havE tO dO. Ferren: firsT, contacT misS coatlE. theN givE A bincH slaP tO thiS spritE thinG. don'T likE itS facE. theN A five-minutE breaK. Ferren: anD theN alchemizE somE stufF. Ferren: … Ferren: ...feelS weirD tO bE alonE iN thE middlE oF A prettY placE. Ferren: I likE iT.
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Post by The Paradoxical Insurgent on May 3, 2016 22:50:07 GMT
>Ferren: Frolic though the hills
>Ferren: Be the Zodiac Killer
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Post by shadowsandbag on May 6, 2016 2:40:45 GMT
Obviously you now have to sing Tiffany's "I think we're alone now" >Screw miss coatle, lets alchemize some cool stuff
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 8, 2016 19:01:00 GMT
((i would like but i dunno that song.)) Ferren: Lead your pack and get hunting No need to say anything more. You lead MOONSTONESPRITE and DOGFATHER (who is still there, somehow) through the starry hills of your new land. There are STARS everywhere. In the sky, in the plants, on the tiny IMP-LIKE CREATURES. Creatures which soon are no more part of this world. You still have your trusty SCYTHE with you. In your first years of life, you have learned never to find yourself without a weapon, whatever the circumstances are. Living in the streets and poor corners turned you into a TOUGH GUY, someone ready to fight whatever would come to him. You would even have become a SHREDDER if you didn't have to keep your CURSE a secret. Trolls with Curses were likely to be TERMINATED, back on Sotergan. People were so SUPERSTITIOUS. But in this land, as alone as you are, you are free to be YOURSELF. No more shades to hide your heterochromia. No more need to fight with stealth and hideable weapons: if you want to STRIFE with a fancy scythe, you can do it. There won't be any need to keep your PRECIOUS THINGS in a hidden stash; you are finally free to be yourself and SCATTER your prized trophies all over the place. There won't be any risk that someday you need to RUN AWAY from another abandoned house, leaving everything behind, only taking what your BINDLE Fetch Modus could allow. Now that the moons aren't dangerous anymore, you can be free of this stupid desire to retrieve some SHINY BALL. If you're gonna transform ever again, it will be ON PURPOSE. You're gonna learn to master Moonfang's Curse. You're gonna learn how to use your TELEPORTING TRICKS. You'll shape this planet YOUR WAY. It will be your HOME, now. The biggest shiny thing you've ever put your PAWS on. That will put to shame all those trolls who mocked you, who shamed you, who insulted you. You're gonna prove to the WORLD how powerful you've become. They are left to strive on a FROZEN PLANET which will likely get destroyed by METEORS and never bear LIFE anymore, while you have a whole new land all by yourself. This time, you are the ALPHA. And the first thing you'll do as alpha wolf will be killing all these parasite imps and liches. Second thing will be bonding with your new pack. Third will be laying down in the shiny grass and gaze at STARS. They're so shiny. You wish you could simply put them in your pocket and look at them whenever you feel down. You'll need to learn how to do that too.
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Post by shadowsandbag on May 10, 2016 2:32:19 GMT
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 10, 2016 8:49:33 GMT
((Weird part is, that's something he'd actually listen to.)) By the way, 'cause of finals and everything, don't expect much until Thursday evening, which is American Thursday morning. Then I'll have all the time I want until the end of June. When we get to this point, while we're at it, I'll have to see a few things, but there is a risk I won't be allowed to draw during summer. I'll try to keep the Tumblr page running but we'd need to wait and see. Talking about projects, I've been thinking about giving an act to Yalia, Hivebent-style. Y'know, fishpeople. Explain their backstory and all, explore more about Nyalon civilization, and put an use to all the worldbuilding. Would that be a good idea? Don't hesitate to tell me about what you'd like to see in the near or not-so-near future.
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 10, 2016 23:55:14 GMT
Ferren: Keep up with the killing, in a classy way. Hell. Fucking. Yes. Those runts better get away from your turf, and quicker than that. No one's gonna mess with your territory. You're gonna kick their butts so hard, they won't even be able to walk. Because they'll be dead. Although that's kinda obvious. And best part is, you're gonna do it with style. (finding suitable bases is harder and harder each day.)
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 15, 2016 23:38:52 GMT
Okay, guys. Let's get serious. On the occasion of Zodiacstuck's third anniversary (May 17th marks the creation of the Zodiacstuck thread on Mspaforums), I've decided to redraw everything. I mean, not everything as in "everything": I'll focus on the first 50 or so panels that need a good polish. I will also re-write most dialogues and texts to clear out any typos, characterization errors, etc. Don't expect much new updates. But if you want to see the changes, start over at the beginning of the FA. Here are some previews. Of course, I won't waste time re-drawing panels I deem "alright". Those done in Fire Alpaca (around the Ferren: Open memo arc), despite not being at the level of what I can do today, don't need that much polish. My main goal is to turn panels like these into panels like these. I don't know how much time it will take, but it will take time. If you want to help me, please tell me if you spot typos or grammar errors in the mirror, and I will fix them. You can also pick a panel you think is particularly ugly, and if I agree with you, I'll redo it. If you want to know whether I'll digitally draw paper panels, the answer is "maybe". I know some photos are of terrible quality; if I find the original drawings, I'll try to take better shots. Thank you for your time. I'll try to supply you with content on the Tumblr page, if I can pull myself to do it.
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Post by Shaodwsandbag on May 17, 2016 0:27:00 GMT
Sounds like a plan! Excited to see the new and improved stuff
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Post by redditstuckteam on May 17, 2016 10:17:16 GMT
Just wanted to say how impressive your style is now, and how much you've improved from the start of this adventure. Keep up the amazing work, and I can't wait to read more.
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 19, 2016 0:34:23 GMT
Here are some previews! I'm going by chronological order, so the first panels are the first to be replaced. Maybe I'll add one more tonight, granted I'm awake enough. Next in line are "Silyam: Back to hive" and "Answer DB", which is Carnos's first appearance. By the way, those animations are really time-cheap to do, compared to anime-style ones. I feel like I'm gonna put a lot of these. (Edit: I've just noticed Silyam's symbol is flipping from one side to the other. Oh well, can't have everything I guess. Let's call it majyyks.)
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 19, 2016 20:16:16 GMT
Some more pics! Knowing myself, I'll get inspired for the next few days and draw panel upon panel, then drop out all of a sudden for weeks. Believe me, this has already happened. Twice. By the way, from Saturday to Tuesday, I'll be out of town for personal reasons and won't have my tablet. But if I manage to bring my computer I might proceed with further text corrections.
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Post by Neptz on May 20, 2016 17:31:06 GMT
she should stop playing all those shit tier mainstream games
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 20, 2016 18:59:57 GMT
she should stop playing all those shit tier mainstream games It was 2am and I hadn't the motivation to draw over a screenshot. Will maybe change it later, but then they'll say I focus too much on artistic details instead of story quality. (but i like those shit tier games :/ )
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Post by eerr on May 20, 2016 22:23:52 GMT
Alright dude I was just giving you trouble to see if you would make it more clear what you wanted for suggestions.
I distinctly remember you messing with me. It's only fair right?
Anyway trying to force something else out is obscene. Maybe I just felt a bit grouchy and jealous?
Your art isn't bad or unnecessary, its just too dense. Like reading war and peace. I'm a diabetic like the mobster kingpin.
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 20, 2016 23:07:33 GMT
It never was my intention to mess with you. I honestly wish I had your flaw-spotting skills. And to be honester, feeling jealous is a thing that happens. How do you think I feel when I read Team Paradox or great Fanventures the like? We've all been there. That's what makes us want to better our own work. (and thus fulfill our ego. Let's not lie.)
About suggestions, I might not need them right now, as I'll focus on the beginnings of the comic. I'll try to render the dialogues and introductions as true to character as possible, shorten out unnecessary text pavés, and give out some free worldbuilding here and there. Art is a secondary concern. (who am I kidding. It is my main concern. I used to draw like a potato and that put off newcomers. No wonder I don't get new readers.)
I'll be blunt: I'm not good at characterization. I honestly don't know how to make a character round, or evolve with time. I don't know how to put friendship or rivalry mechanics into place. If you ask me what are the dynamics of the Homestuck Alpha Kids, I'll tell you I didn't understand any of it. (or at least, not the more subtle things that make them unique, like why Dirk and Jake broke up.) But I try. Even though I kinda cheat by backtracking and rewriting descriptions so it feels as if there's an evolution, I try. I know the result will never be perfect, and people will still nope out of it. But it's before all a thing I do as I like, and as I can. Zodiacstuck will never be perfect despite all my attempts, but I will enjoy doing it anyway.
If you do have a suggestion for the LoMaF arc, feel free to drop one. Can't tell when I'll restart regular updates. It's 1am and I didn't mean to write another pavé, but did anyway. Sorry.
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Post by eerr on May 21, 2016 1:01:17 GMT
Writing is hard. What isn't so obvious:
It's not that you're bad at it, its that you don't understand it's good to be shitty about it. Perfection is an abomination that will destroy you.
I remember I used to play soccer and run around an open field for hours. >Ferren: Feel the adrenaline from running around.
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 21, 2016 9:21:03 GMT
I guess that makes sense, but what's the point in writing like a potato chip, only to be told your writing sucks ? There are hundred of other Stuckventures out there and most people nope out before they get past the first page. To keep the readership interested, you must clearly show what's unique about your style and story. It's alright to start as shitty, accept critique, and then improve; but people aren't interested in the evolution of your skill. They want good content from the first page. They have read countless Stuckventures and want something refreshing. If they read a single more "A young troll stands in their room", they're going to nope out. Who cares if you've got a good plot twist coming up 180+ pages later, or if you have a completely restructured troll society ? If you can't hook up readers from the start, you never will. I know there are people who advertise for good adventures they've read, but who in all of the Infinity Pond ever cares ? You have to advertise yourself, so you better be doing it good. Perfection isn't my goal. It's impossible to achieve anyway. But I can at least try and aim for uniqueness. It's going to be even harder to achieve, but in the end it's worth it.
Also I'm sorry if that sounded like a harsh rant but I had to get that of my chest. Please understand.
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 25, 2016 17:10:36 GMT
Alright. Paper panels have been replaced with (hopefully) better versions of themselves. I wish I had a proper scanner.
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 26, 2016 14:03:06 GMT
I guess that now that there isn't any commands to give, everyone's gone now. Oh well. That doesn't mean I'm giving up. Now that I've thought about it, giving the Yalia a Hivebent-style arc could bring in some fun. Colorful art and new species, *worldbulding*... Various garbage thoughts under the cut. .beitori nyalon lia'rase layaren ,sha ranalenri noke aliavan kali'ran layari-va !sha rakenri kali'ral ne'drak ?kai beitori nyalon ne'drak kein'ral Literally: "Young Nyalon stands bed. Past ten solar cycles they given alive-ness, now they will give name! What young Nyalon name will be?" ,ra gatadoka gata'ra !si'kiravari-va "You have arms, dumb!" What do you mean, "inventing a new language is a bit too far-fetched, especially is your Fanventure is shit"? To that I reply: !mai'laya'ra I'll give them a whole arc and call it Ne'layari. (That kinda means something like "at home", with also a pun on "alive for the better".) And I'll love doing it.
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 28, 2016 23:01:17 GMT
More funny gifs, and Carnos being silly. Also, I think Gallia has some serious homicidal tendencies. I mean, she literally shoots at him. Even for her "this hurts me more than it huts you" mentality, that's a bit extreme. Add that to the list of "things I'm too lazy to explain so let's call it magic".
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Post by SpottedBlades on May 30, 2016 19:39:39 GMT
By the way, I redid the cover for Act 1. Tell me wat you think of it. Symbols and Easter Eggs everywhere, as usual. Pffft. Ha ha. I hate myself.
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