Spira-Virgo
Stoutrunt
Huh, so this is the new forums~
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Post by Spira-Virgo on Sept 13, 2016 17:21:52 GMT
> Bonding time!  |
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Post by Sharkalien on Sept 13, 2016 20:53:28 GMT
>Nino & Five: Introduce yourselves
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Post by Keiya on Sept 13, 2016 23:17:58 GMT
> Now kiss!
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Post by eerr on Sept 13, 2016 23:19:16 GMT
>Look up.
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Post by coke on Sept 14, 2016 16:33:41 GMT
>Nino: Attempt to add the girl to your party, maybe it'll work?
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Post by coke on Sept 14, 2016 16:35:05 GMT
>Enter Name of Spear girl
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Post by automatedTimeshift on Sept 15, 2016 0:45:24 GMT
Aria: Be thankful of Nino for taking care of Ludwig... And also thank five I guess.
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Post by 1337Walrus on Sept 15, 2016 3:52:57 GMT
> Be the GOOD DOG, and lick your BEST FRIENDS
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Post by Deleted on Sept 15, 2016 10:32:25 GMT
> Bonding time!  Nino: I'm sorry about earlier...Aria: What do you mean?Nino: I kinda freaked out because I thought you were a monster,
Nino: and um... I said some bad things.
Nino: Yeah. Sorry.
Aria: Oh.
Aria: Don't worry, I understand.
Aria: Most humans would probably have the same reaction.
Nino: So, that monster appearance...
Nino: Was that your ability?
Aria: Yes!
Aria: It's kinda lame, but I can disguise myself like that.
Nino: Nah, can't be any lamer than my ability!Aria: Hehe.>Nino & Five: Introduce yourselves  Aria: I think we had a bad start back there.
Aria: So, let's start over from the beginning!
Aria: I'm Aria, Aria Elwyn. Nino: I'm Nino! and this little one's Five.
Aria: Hehe, she seems to be fond of Ludwig.
Aria: It's nice to meet you both!Nino: It's nice to meet you too!
> Be the GOOD DOG, and lick your BEST FRIENDS  Aria: Ludwig! you silly dog!Aria: You made me so worried, you know that.Aria: Be thankful of Nino for taking care of Ludwig... And also thank five I guess.  Nino: So he really is your dog.Aria: Yep!
Aria: Don't ever run away like that again, ludwig.Nino: Well, um...
Nino: Sorry I guess...
Nino: We kinda stole him from you, hehe.
Aria: Oh, I guess so...
Aria: But, in retrospect,
Aria: you kept him safe and protected him!
Aria: I appreciate that a lot!
Nino: Yeah, I guess.
Nino: Sorry for making you worry about him!
Aria: Hehe, it's fine.
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Aria: So...
Aria: I want to ask what you're doing in the monster's world,
Aria: And I suppose you want to ask me the same,
Aria: But...
Nino: Yeah, we don't have much time right now.
Nino: We need to think of a plan.
i hate writing dialog i hate it so much
i might have to go back and edit some panels, i've noticed a lot of art errors and misspellings
and also i just want to redraw some things that i'm not satisfied with
also, if you notice typos or anything, it'd be helpful if you let me know. english isn't my first language :U
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Post by Piono on Sept 15, 2016 14:30:30 GMT
Huh, wow. Your English has been pretty darn good.
Also, yes, dialogue is hard. Very hard.
>Plans: Make 'em happen.
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tronn
Rungjumpin' Ragamuffin
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Post by tronn on Sept 15, 2016 18:55:40 GMT
>Maybe you could ambush the spear-thrower? Look for a place to hide.
All caught up, this is a very adorable adventure!
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Post by Sharkalien on Sept 15, 2016 20:08:08 GMT
Ha, your English is better than some native speakers >Make a Wile E. Coyote-esque trap, like digging a hole and covering it with leaves |
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Post by 1337Walrus on Sept 16, 2016 0:47:36 GMT
> Discuss next plan of action. Now that we're friends with her, what should we do next to advance our goal?
Also, inventory check on everyone.
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Post by coke on Sept 16, 2016 15:41:05 GMT
>Nino, Aria and Five: Make all the plans. All of them.
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Spira-Virgo
Stoutrunt
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Post by Spira-Virgo on Sept 17, 2016 4:06:03 GMT
>Let me guess, you fall into a hole when you were noting but a wee baby and later was adopted by a monster family and you are the sworn protector of them?
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Post by Deleted on Sept 18, 2016 10:24:45 GMT
>Nino, Aria and Five: Make all the plans. All of them.  Nino: We need to do something about whomever's after us.
Aria: Well, that person's a local guard around the village.
Aria: If we can get past her, we'll reach the village safely.
Nino: Hmm...> Inventory check on everyone.    You don't seem to have anything that might help, and neither does Aria. In fact, you seem to have a lot of useless stuff in your inventory right now. You don't even remember picking up half of it! You guess you're gonna have to make-do with what you have. >Make a Wile E. Coyote-esque trap, like digging a hole and covering it with leaves  Nino: Oh! I know!
Aria: Ah, you have a plan?
Nino: Yeah!
Aria: Well, what is it? Nino: Ok, what if we made a trap?Nino: Like a big hole!
Aria: Wait, what?Nino: Look, look, I'll show you.-->
 Nino: See, right here, where I'm standing!Aria: I don't... see anything.Nino: No, I mean,Nino: This spot would be perfect for a trap!Aria: ...And how would we make that?Nino: Ok see, we dig a huge hole,Nino: Cover it with leaves, and like, sticks,Nino: And voila!Aria: How...
Aria: How would we dig a hole? With our hands?Nino: Well...Nino: Ludwig can do it.
Aria: I don't think we have enough time to do all that.Nino: No, no, it can work, see...-->
 Nino: ...>Maybe you could ambush the spear-thrower? Look for a place to hide. All caught up, this is a very adorable adventure!
 Nino: Ok, you win.Nino: But I have another plan!Aria: As long as it doesn't involve time-consuming steps...Nino: Oh, it's easy stuff.Nino: We can just hide and ambush the guard!Aria: I don't think that's a good idea.Nino: What? Why not?Aria: That would probably be really dangerous.
Aria: You saw how fast she chucked her spears at us before.Nino: Oh.Nino: Well...-->
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 Nino: Goddamn, those plans really wouldn't work huh.Nino: And I was so confident in them!
Aria: Well, I've thought of a plan.Nino: You did? Really?
Aria: Yup! But you have to play along for it to work.
I feel like the dialog and art quality is vastly different in each update lmao So school's back, there's that. I might have to take hiatuses for exams and stuff in the future, but for now I'll keep going with the regular update schedule. Also, opinions on the recent updates? Do you think the quality is dropping, or is it just fine? :0 |
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Post by automatedTimeshift on Sept 18, 2016 13:00:18 GMT
It involves Nino being bait, doesn't it?
(Quality is just fine. Better than most can do even with re-used scenes.)
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Post by badatnames on Sept 18, 2016 15:47:46 GMT
All updates are good updates for me.
>Nino: You don't have a lot of options, do you?
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Spira-Virgo
Stoutrunt
Huh, so this is the new forums~
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Post by Spira-Virgo on Sept 18, 2016 15:56:46 GMT
Its fine bro. I think maybe you should only make two updates a week. So you have more time to your other chores and commitments.
> Five, ask Aria if you can have hair like hers.
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Post by Sharkalien on Sept 19, 2016 0:37:27 GMT
There's too much sitting. Other than that, the quality is just fine
>Aria: Equip disguise and pretend Nino is your prisoner (kinky)
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Post by Piono on Sept 19, 2016 2:06:17 GMT
Looks good to me.
>plan: fail miserably.
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Post by 1337Walrus on Sept 19, 2016 6:52:38 GMT
> Nino: Be the bait.
> Nino: What is WITH your hair? It really makes you stand out, which could be bad in the future, maybe.
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Post by amphouse on Sept 20, 2016 2:33:06 GMT
>Aria: Disguise Nino as another monster.
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Post by 1337Walrus on Sept 20, 2016 3:04:59 GMT
>Aria: Disguise Nino as another monster. So yeah, do this. |
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tronn
Rungjumpin' Ragamuffin
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Post by tronn on Sept 20, 2016 6:21:02 GMT
>Plan: Require Nino disguised as a damsel in distress. No, it is necessary, don't question it.
>Aria: Okay you just wanted to see him in a dress for a laugh and you made that part up.
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