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Post by charcoalTorture on Jul 23, 2016 2:54:41 GMT
My U4G Contest entry! Thread for the contest. I had to decide on either doing the U4G contest or remaking one of my older forum adventures. Here we are! haha. I still plan on remaking one of my old forum adventures though, probably after this contest is over at least. Maybe this time I'll actually make a mirror for them. For now, they're accessible via the Wayback Machine. If people ask, I can link them here. May the best adventure win!It’s later in the night. You’re out to look for bars to check out, but all of the bars in town are full or closed. Well, except for this one. No one goes in there, on account of the… odd people who run it. Oh well, you’ll see what the rumors are whining about. There aren’t even any cars parked in the parking lot, are they even open?  Go right on in. It’s a seat yourself.
Well, they seem to be open...  Oh! Hello! Hi! Welcome! Remember me? I’m Zarik! But... you’ve arrived a bit too late, I’m afraid. The show’s over. Look, even the spotlight guy is gone!
 GAH! Lower the brightness! Okay, okay! Maybe he hasn’t left yet.
You’re looking for a story, right? Some fiction? Non-fiction? doesn’t matter? Okay! I should’ve probably finished telling you about the knives story first, but… whatever! I think you’ll like this one better. It’s about a kid who goes to see his brother in the hospital. It’s better than it sounds! Just watch and listen!
Oh! feel free to ask me any questions by asking for me by name, by the way!
Georgie Aspicio Hospital is the only hospital in this small city. Whether ER visits or simple checkups, this hospital did it. It’s staff are some of the nicest, and facilities are some of the cleanest. Your brother has gotten into a car accident, and you’ve got to go see him. It’s a minor injury, he says. Cuts and bruises, he says. You might as well go in through the front doors and ask what room he’s in. But before you do that, what’s your name? |
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Post by Sharkalien on Jul 23, 2016 2:58:45 GMT
>Ol' One Eye
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Post by immemorAugur on Jul 23, 2016 5:56:23 GMT
>Jerry Rature
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Post by Curris on Jul 23, 2016 9:06:55 GMT
Waldo Tenford
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Post by ominousscientist on Jul 24, 2016 3:26:34 GMT
>Devin Baxter
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Post by Arashi500 on Jul 24, 2016 4:33:34 GMT
>Timmy "The Rat" Jones
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Post by charcoalTorture on Jul 25, 2016 20:24:28 GMT
 Yes! I am the demonic, one eyed serpent who has flattened many civilizations throughout time! I slumber, awaiting my next target. I am whispered about during campfire stories, my many names too terrifying to speak of. Ol’ One Eye is the safest one to mention.
In all seriousness, though…I’m Waldo Jones Rature. My friends call me ‘Wally’ ‘The Rat’ or just ‘Rat’ most of the time.
Jerry Devin Tenford’s my brother’s name. He changed his last name a couple months ago, for whatever reason.
Now to go see that fool.Can I help you with something? Have a good visit at Georgie Aspicio Hospital.
Cool, thanks.Have a good visit at Georgie Aspicio Hospital.
Uhh… Are you okay?
Have a good visit at Georgie Aspicio Hospital.
Forget I asked.The nurses must be worked to death here to sound like a broken record. No! You shouldn’t have gone through! Come this way, quickly!
Huh?Did those cameras pop out of the walls? WARNING: Return to the other side of the red line or be vaporized.
Whoa! Okay. Jeez. What’s going on? It’s looking really empty in here. We’re trapped in here. The doors lock from the outside and you’ll get zapped out of existence if you try to escape. Burned to a crisp and launched into outer space. The doctors and staff are gone. Those who hadn’t left already when we got here, well...
What? That’s silly. Who are you?It’s true! I’ve seen a few people go poof already. I’m Ed. I’m just watching the door for other people right now, the rest of us are either wandering or in the lunchroom. Go see ‘em for a rundown of the rules around here. Who’re you?
Waldo. Call me Wally or Rat, either is fine.Rat?
My last name’s Rature. Rat rolled off the tongue easier to some people.Haha. We’re going to need a rat to escape this place, so it looks like you’re fitting the bill for that! Oh, by the way… not everyone gets along.
Is that bandage the result of you finding out the cameras hurt you?No, it isn’t. Pre-existing medical condition, thank you very much.
Right. Wait, does that mean your brother isn’t here? Or are they treating him in a trashed, empty hospital? How many people are trapped here? Why haven’t the police been called? What should you do now? |
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Post by Sharkalien on Jul 25, 2016 20:32:26 GMT
>Find a restroom. It's been a couple hours.
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Post by The One Guy on Jul 25, 2016 20:51:00 GMT
> See if you can find any patient records.
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Post by Arashi500 on Jul 25, 2016 23:10:12 GMT
>Attempt to call for help from the outside.
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Post by GreatKaiserNui on Jul 26, 2016 0:41:54 GMT
Ol' One-eye: Assure us you will be in this adventure sooner or later.
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Post by charcoalTorture on Jul 29, 2016 4:01:27 GMT
>Find a restroom. It's been a couple hours. While the feeling of freedom would be great, the urge to use the restroom is greater. None of these rooms have toilets. What kind of hospital is this?! Nevermind the fact that the beds obviously weren’t used for patients. Finally, there’s one! Ahh, much better. Good thing the restrooms are working. The unfortunate part is that there’s obviously a camera in the corner. > See if you can find any patient records. Patient records? Wouldn’t they be in Staff Offices? Confidential information like that wouldn’t just be left around- Of course there’s one right here. How many records are left around for people to find? What’s Project Dracon? More than likely some government conspiracy tinfoil hat project. >Attempt to call for help from the outside. Yeah. You’ve had just about enough of this hospital. Your brother probably isn’t here. To the windows! There’s cameras around the windows too? Go figure. Well, just because there’s a red line there doesn’t mean there’s cameras there…  Hey kid! Don’t go near the windows! Unless you’re trying to kill yourself.
Huh? They’ve got the cameras too?
Yeah. Don’t try your phone either. No service. Who are you? I’m guessing you just got in.
Yeah. I’m Waldo. Call me Wally, or Rat, though. Rature’s my last name.
Hahahaha. Seriously? Hey guys! I found Waldo!
A day doesn’t go by without someone making that joke. It’s all in good spirits though, so you don’t really care anymore. Stop dicking around in the hallway!
I’m Lucas. That brat who yelled is Cammie.
Okay.
Ol' One-eye: Assure us you will be in this adventure sooner or later.  Why, as a matter of fact! I was planning on freeing these pitiful mortals in about five updates. I’ll break through the walls of the hospital and let everyone go free, so long as they worship and fear me for the rest of their short, meaningless existences.
Ohh no you don’t! Bad serpent demon! I’m telling the story! You can’t just change the plot!
How dare you touch Ol’ One-eye!
Ol’ One-eye’s gonna be turned into no-eyed tree branch if he doesn’t behave!
Fine. I’ll play your little game, mortal!
Five updates from now is waaaaay too early for you to appear, if you appear at all. Nevermind the fact you would’ve Deus ex Machina’d Wally out of one of the main problems he has to solve himself. It would’ve ruined the story! And, back to the story...
You found a Mental Ward Patient Record! These folders may or may not be scrambled around the hospital. Collecting all of them moves you closer to escaping the hospital, but you don’t need all of them to leave. I won’t say how many there are, but I will tell you when you have all of them. |
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Post by Curris on Jul 29, 2016 4:05:51 GMT
Hrm. You need to find a utility closet. Maybe find a way to cut power. I doubt cameras and lasers work if you take down the grid.
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Post by Arashi500 on Jul 29, 2016 6:36:58 GMT
>Try throwing something at a camera.
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Post by The One Guy on Jul 29, 2016 14:51:29 GMT
> There appeared to be another record in room 105.
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Post by charcoalTorture on Aug 3, 2016 3:50:45 GMT
Hrm. You need to find a utility closet. Maybe find a way to cut power. I doubt cameras and lasers work if you take down the grid.
What?
Uhh... we should cut the power to turn off the cameras. You know, to escape?
That’s brilliant Einstein! Why didn’t I think of that? Oh that’s right... there’s two problems: One, the generator room’s in the basement. Two, it’s guarded by KOS long-range camera wielding turrets. We’ve already lost people going down there.
You don't have to be so rude about it.
Well I’M sorry. Maybe, you should go into the lunchroom and tell everyone else your plan? Or, or maybe? Maybe you should go down in the basement yourself and have a look! Yeah, that’s the best idea.
Someone woke up on the wrong side of the bed this morning. You’re probably not going to get along with him. Maybe you should just go look at the utility closet. Upon further investigation, the utility room has common cleaning supplies, broken glass, painting equipment, hygiene propaganda, and a ladder. Maybe we can use the ladder or cleaning supplies for something later? > There appeared to be another record in room 105. This doesn’t appear to be a mental patient ward record. Rather, a staff member’s record. The folder contained a notepad at one point, but all of the pages were ripped out violently. There’s a piece of paper taped to the inside of the folder. Dots. Also, the folder belonged to a Psychiatrist named L. Mayles.  Hey, uh, you’re Wally right?
Yeah. What’s up?
I’m Ben. Nice shirt. I heard Lucas yelling in the hall and I wanted to see who his victim was.
Thanks?
Follow me. You should probably meet everyone else instead of wandering around.
Okay…
There’s a lot of people here.  I’m tired of you guys just standing around and arguing! Get out of my way, I’m getting out of here.
 That’s suicide! You know what the cameras’ll do!
I’ve got five seconds. That’s a lot of time! It’s enough time to run to the door and open it.
 Seriously, don’t try it.
Don’t tell me what to do!
>Try throwing something at a camera.
Don’t tell me what to do!
WARNING: Return to the other side of the red line or be vaporized.
Oh crap, the doors are locked from the outside!
Oh dear. Didn’t even know his name. He just got here...
And another one gone, and another one gone, another one bites the dust! Good riddance. He was way too loud.
Seriously?! You’re going to make a joke about someone dying right in front of us?
Lighten up. Life’s too short to be crying over a stranger’s death. That, and being a fuckin’ weaboo.
You’re going to criticize my tastes in entertainment when this situation has nothing to do with it?
 Guys, please stop fighting...
DON’T even talk to me, cripple, until you pull your weight around here.
Lucas stop.
I’m not listening to Mr. Attention-Seeking Bandage either. Kys.
Alright, I’ve heard enough outta you!
Fight me bro! 1 v 1 me!
Stop fighting. We won’t escape this place without working together. Then we can all go our separate ways. Okay?
Pfft. I’m not working with anyone. Later scrubs.
Lucas… is always like that. I like your spirit, kid. Waldo right?
Wally or Rat’s fine. Easier for people to remember.
Okay, Wally. You’ve probably met Lucas, Ben, and Ed already. I’m Cammie. Headband over there’s Steven, and the one armed kid is Brandon. Since you’re just joining us, I’ll line up the information we’ve got about this place.
This hospital, Georgie Aspicio, has four floors, a roof, and a basement. We’re on the first floor right now. The second and third floors are full of hospital rooms, but the third floor has offices too. The fourth floor is the staff wing, but we’re not able to get in there: It requires a keycard. The roof’s got a helipad and some cameras, but they’re not armed. There is a drone that patrols up there, but I haven’t seen it for a couple days.
How long have you been in here?
Two weeks, tops. Everyone else has been here a shorter time. The kitchen keeps restocking... The basement is our objective: the generator room, the security room, and I’d imagine the door locking systems are down there. The problem is that there’s an aggressive sharpshooter camera turret down there. We’ve had people go down there and fail to return. Any questions about anything I may have missed?
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Post by The One Guy on Aug 3, 2016 4:48:59 GMT
This doesn’t appear to be a mental patient ward record. Rather, a staff member’s record. The folder contained a notepad at one point, but all of the pages were ripped out violently. There’s a piece of paper taped to the inside of the folder. Dots. It's braille! ... Take the lost to make the kbew? |
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Post by charcoalTorture on Aug 12, 2016 2:46:33 GMT
It's braille! ... Take the lost to make the kbew?
Wait, where do you clean your clothes?There’s a laundry room on the third floor.
Aren’t laundry rooms supposed to be in the basement?
I’m no architect, don’t ask me why they’re up there.
I’m going to go look around some more.
Okay. Sayōnara, uh, I mean bye.
Over by where the stranger got fried, there was a strange piece of metal sitting on the ground. Nevermind, it’s just a vent cover. It must have fallen off of the ceiling. It's braille! ... Take the lost to make the new?
Are you... talking about Doctor Mayles’ folder?
Huh? Yeah, I found it lying in one of the rooms.
He was one of the first people to be trapped here…
Oh. How long has this place been trapping people?
I don’t know.
I see.
That braille is part of a poem… That’s what he told me. There are more pieces too.
Oh, okay.
A poem in braille. Okay. So there’s patient records and pieces of a braille poem? What’s next? You’re gonna be hoarder by the time you get out of here. For now, though, there’s a bunch of things to do. There’s exploring the other floors, breaking into the keycarded floor, escape planning, checking out the rooftop, making friends/enemies with everyone, and more. What should you do next? Beware of Zarik's misspellings in the future >  EDIT: fixed up the intro panels to be better. New dialogue, but not story breakingly new. |
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Post by Arashi500 on Aug 12, 2016 6:01:02 GMT
>Let's try exploring the other floors first.
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Post by The One Guy on Aug 12, 2016 17:50:08 GMT
Ahhhhhh! Oh no, I did that wrong! I’m sorry, curse me for trying to write something without someone else looking at it! It was supposed to say ‘new’, not 'kbew'. Okay okay. Pretend it’s right. Pretend it’s written correctly!
Ah, for what it's worth, you did it correctly except for the spacing: you put the same amount of space between the two columns of the N character as you did between different letters, splitting it into two characters. |
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Post by charcoalTorture on Aug 21, 2016 19:35:02 GMT
Ah, for what it's worth, you did it correctly except for the spacing: you put the same amount of space between the two columns of the N character as you did between different letters, splitting it into two characters. >Let's try exploring the other floors first. Right. Since the current floor has pretty much been explored fully, save visiting the kitchen, the second floor will be the next destination. Elevator up! Nothing out of the ordinary so far, other than someone scratching out parts of the signs and writing in their own awful descriptions. What the heck is a gnarly walrus room? Boring puzzle room? Seems to be one of the least weird places. Let’s go there first. Okay, who had the bright idea of putting in a bad obstacle-course-looking puzzle? There’s something over there, too. You’re not fast enough to run over there and retrieve it before getting fried, but there may be someone downstairs capable of running quick enough. Sometimes, you’ll have to rely on others to retrieve things. Should you try to get through by yourself, it will only result in death! Befriend certain people to access the rewards of these puzzles. Keep in mind that there is always more than one way to solve a puzzle!Because it’s the first puzzle, I’ll tell you what you need to do: You’ve got to press the three red buttons, starting with the far right one, then the far left one, then the close one, and grab the object before the cameras fry you. Others will be more obvious, while others will be more difficult!Where should you go next? |
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Post by Arashi500 on Aug 21, 2016 21:42:33 GMT
>Check out the "Gnarly Walrus Room" and the "420 Blaze It Room" next.
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Post by Sharkalien on Aug 21, 2016 23:19:26 GMT
>"420 blaze it room". Smoke weed everyday
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Post by smuchmuch on Aug 22, 2016 21:09:44 GMT
>Well if you're going to be stuck here for a while (and it sure look like so), you might as well check the empty rooms to find yourself a secure-ish place.
(there's something that is both elegant yet sorta unsetling about your art style)
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